My writing errors

Tom Clayton.(2001).Story Street. The BLUE Game >
Clayton, Tom. (2001). The Blue Game (Story Street).

286words >
286 words

bus guide talk >>
the bus guide talked

I remember that two things >>
I remember THOSE two things

New York is the world famous place >
New York is a world-famous place

First, I want to introduce about Food culture of NY. >
First, I want to introduce the Food culture of NY.

New York City has about 24000 restaurant.
New York City has about 24,000 restaurants.

came to there >>
came there

avoid starting sentences with
So,
And,
But,

Then, I want to introduce Japanese food in NY. >>
Let us turn our attention to Japanese food in New York. OR
It is interested to note that there is lots of Japanese food in New York. OR…

When at least the school bell rang >>
When at last the school bell rang

I want to know that actually what he did. >>
I want to know what he actually did.

Person Education >>
Pearson Education